Whether
or not people believe that terrorism is an issue present today, it has still
been a very prominent topic that allows people to look deeper and identify its
original historical roots. The definition of terrorism is the use of violence
and threats to intimidate or coerce, especially for political purposes.
Although this is one definition of terrorism, where exactly do these threats
aim? One example or act of terrorism occurred on September 11, 2001 on the
homeland of the United States of America. The “taken” 2,983 lives left America
at silence when it comes to 9/11, in fact, civilians and experts are not even
sure if this country feels safer than it did a decade ago. Michael Chertoff
(holder of Cabinet under former President Bush) had the courage to claim that
our country is indeed safer, however, it is actually on a traumatic up rise. Kenneth
Jost, author of Remembering 9/11,
maintains that there is more than just a simple answer at defining the
historical roots of terrorism. He insured that all of his readers understand that
our country needs to be aware that the "war on terror" has been
addressed; yet not improved. [compound sentence with a semicolon]
Granted
that researchers and experts show that the United States is safer than a decade
ago, terrorist groups are still looking and finding ways to become equal,
instill fear, AND intimidate minds of innocent populations. [compound sentence with a comma, FANBOYS] The purpose of this
study is to examine how the historical origins of terrorism are still prevalent
today through the act of racism. The role of terrorism will be seen through an
analysis of equality, through the instilment of fear, AND through the analysis
of intimidation. [compound sentence with a comma, FANBOYS] As countries are constantly involved with terrorism and war on
terror, participation and specific accounts of response and quick action need
to take place in order to change the ways that terrorism is becoming more
powerful and affecting the minds of several populations. For example, one way to tone down
terrorism would be through the education of racism. [sentence beginning with a FANBOYS] Although acknowledging
racist acts do not seem to be a priority when it comes to solutions, the
understanding and education of how prejudices and stereotypes can affect
international terrorism can help.
Interesting topic, Everett.
ReplyDeleteThe semicolon compound sentence highlighted isn't really a compound sentence. "He insured that all of his readers understand that our country needs to be aware that the "war on terror" has been addressed; yet not improved." If you take only the part after the semicolon, the clause should be able to stand on its own as an independent sentence. It doesn't because there is no subject. To make it a compound sentence, you could change it to: "He insured that all of his readers understand that our country needs to be aware that the "war on terror" has been addressed; yet it is not improved."
The FANBOYS with comma sentences aren't quite there, either. They both demonstrate ands with commas as functions of parts of a series, not the creation of compound sentences.
As for the sentence that starts with For, I'm not sure whether you have it quite correct. For example does not suggest cause, which is the function of for in a compound sentence.
You did miss one comma splice. "The “taken” 2,983 lives left America at silence when it comes to 9/11, in fact, civilians and experts are not even sure if this country feels safer than it did a decade ago." After the 9/11, you need either a FANBOYS, a semicolon, or a new sentence.
I do like your paper Everett,
ReplyDeleteYou did well on the patterns of the week and there were a few mistakes. I noticed the end FA at the beginning of the sentence isn't actually a Prepositional Phrase. Other than that Rochelle is right about the other sentences and how they aren't quite there yet. Keep up the work you were very close.
excellent responses, yall. And Jeremy's right about "for example": it's a prepositional phrase.
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